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Pathfinder page exercise by shiprock Pathfinder page exercise by shiprock
I do this comic page(pencil) of Pathfinder for exercise, is not test, is only my personal exercise,
in this page are two funny goblin with Kyra the cleric (Paizo)

I accept comment :)

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lepetitgroin Oct 25, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Hey no comments on here, but it's quite great.
I see you a critique, so let me try.
Well your idea of composition with a particular shape for the box is cool, an the fact that the head go out of the shot is nice to begin the reading of the page.
It's normally recommended, every time you change a shot you turn at least by 30 degrees your camera angle. between shot 1 and 2 it's a straight close up. You could of course choose to don't respect the rule, but it's on purpose. Like with speed lines to accentuate the drama effect etc...
I am not sure that from his map on shot 2, there is an effect, but if it's the case, put it in the middle, or put the cam angle a bit over the character may accentuate that. 
On the last shot the way you did the strokes at the back is great, but they could be shorter to be less rough.
After the way you detach the different layers is really efficient. And the design overall is real nice.
Great job ;)
shiprock Oct 26, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Hi, thank for all suggest, you have reason for use of camera,in this page i use basic rules in next tes i try use different angle vision, and thank for compliment ;)

lepetitgroin Oct 26, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
You're welcome, hope it helps, it's always hard to do a critique cuz the work is there, and you know how hard is it to do it... so you don'want to hurt or anything.
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